Friday Phrasings & Second POV

For this Friday Phrases, I decided to test out using second person narrative in micro fiction. I cannot say it’s a point of view I consider often. It seems kind of natural to do, but simultaneously awkward. It resulted in a series of Tweets, but here it is all together.

You stare in the mirror, refocusing your eyes. Sweat from outside maps paths down your face. Is this person on the prowl?
You ponder & head back out into the night. In the middle of September it shouldn’t be over 90 degrees nor this muggy.
A passing glance catches her approaching. She smiles as if she’s a reincarnated 20 year old Lauren Bacall.
Hello, is what you want to say, but only silence hangs in the air. You pass each other. She looks back. The moment lost.

I was aiming for each snippet as a stand alone Tweet, and I think it worked. I have presented the lines  in the way they appeared for Twitter. I also did another haiku as I find those a fun and interesting way to convey things with obvious limitations.

Oh sultry evenings
Long for Canadian cold
Next time I’ll stay there

I may toy around more with second person in micro or flash fiction, and see what I really think of it.
What are your thoughts on this tricky narrative? If you have any or references, please feel free to leave them via comments 🙂


Friday Phrases

Last Friday, I (@TheSquibbler) participated in the Twitter event Friday Phrases for the first time. My first tweet was a simple “haiku,”

A variety
She has gained, of donuts sweet
Plus three, gluttony? #FP

Followed by another light-hearted poem:

Hundreds of tiny corpses
pushed to the street with broom
while thousands of little bodies watched on,
not wanting to go too soon. #FP

I have to admit, it was exciting  to take part in something that immediately puts a taste of your writing out there and so many others join in on. There’s a sense of community, but also no judgment. It’s all in the spirit of fun, writing and creativity. Professional, amateur and those in between (or even non writers) take to their Twitters weekly. Some get lost in it for a couple of hours or come back to it throughout the day. Others choose to tell longer stories in serial tweet form. Nearly anything is fair game, as long as it’s within 140 characters or less. So there’s no pressure, which I am a huge fan of,  although having a little added stress can cause creativity, it just seems to be a different kind of creative.  As to the pieces themselves, many grabbed my attention as I scrolled the feed. Some of my favorites were probably the stories, and I saw more of them during the latter part of the day. Some were funny, while others touched on drama or horror. Pretty much covering all genres. I look forward to what writings will appear tomorrow (or later tonight for the people who get a jump on it).

This week, I plan to double the amount of tweets and will consider other hashtagged events for micro fiction and/or poetry. It’s nice to continue adding more in my life that encourages writing. So, if you have a Twitter and weren’t already aware of it, perhaps you can give FridayPhrases a go, and see what it does for your writing and/or creativity. If nothing else, have fun!